Peer Review for Hannah Gardner

Yay peer review! Let's do the thing.

• The Inseparability of Nature and Nurture- Hannah Gardner
• I'm making a recommendation about form- Hannah seemed worried that use of "I" and "you" was not appropriate for a standard college essay but since it's an argument I think that it is just fine. 
• I think I helped because I pointed out that part of the argument is that you have to relate to the person reading it, and it's pretty much impossible to do that without using "I" or "you". Standard college essays should be formal, but this isn't your typical research report. Since you're actively taking a side, I think it's just fine to keep a casual tone as long as it stays somewhat aloft, so to speak. 
• I included some suggestions from the "conclusion" subset of Student's Guide. I suggested that it be more argumentative than leaving non-leaning information for the reader. I think Hannah should conclude with her view and why that view is the best way to take on the issue.
• I really liked Hannah's word choice. In the middle sections when she talks about how genes can't be separated from environment, she does so very eloquently in a way that I don't think I could have.