Editorial Report A

Here I'll be telling you how some things changed. Enthralling.

1. So I did a few things to this content. At the suggestion of Mr. Bottai, I:

1. Gave my sociopath a pseudonym and some context
2. Gave a few more details as to how that personality type manifests itself in the lives of other people, in this case those other people being me
3. Tried to really convey that this is why I hate Trump so much (well, the biggest reason anyway) and added some dramatic language towards the end there. 
4. Oh, and I added the proper citations. Purdue OWL said that for internet sources with no page numbers all I needed was the last name of the author, so that's all I put. 

2. Form changed a lot. Instead of making a third body paragraph about an endless list of Trump insults that really could end up going nowhere and didn't have as much purpose as my other ones, I took the pathos part from the second body paragraph (because it was already like seven pages) and made it it's own supporting paragraph. This allowed me to make the content changes that I wanted to and not worry that it was getting too long.

Here are the hyperlinks. It's not one page or less, sorry about it. The revised version is pretty money in my opinion.

First Draft

Second Draft