Saturday, February 20, 2016

Local Revision: Variety

In this post I'll be evaluating my sentence variety.

1. I don't think my sentences are redundant anywhere, but as far as specific words go I use the word "said" a lot as it pertains to quotes. My lengths and word use vary as a whole- in general I think my sentence variation is in a good solid place.

2. My paragraph structures are all similar but I think that's a good thing- it's standard. It shows I'm offering all of my stakeholders equal time and consideration. My transitions between paragraphs and stakeholders are smooth, in general I think I've done well in this category.

3. My only main weakness as far as vocabulary goes is word variation- as I mentioned earlier, I used the word "said" a lot as it pertains to quotes. Additionally, I use the word "see" many times, but it's relevant. I have to use the word because people "see" different colors in the dress. However, in some of these places I can change my word use to something like "perceive".

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