Saturday, March 26, 2016

Peer Review for David Klebosky

In this post I'll be peer reviewing someone not in my section. So I guess I did 9b first, oops. Here goes.

The Activity- A suggestion about Form (specifically genre conventions- copy pasted onto David's blog)

By the way, you can find this project here.

I think the content for your draft is spot on! It's witty and detailed, and I like how you made use of short paragraphs and white space. I also liked how you used a local project as an example, because I know that I (along with many other Tucson natives I'm sure) was extremely irritated with how long the La Cholla project took. 
I know you said in your open note to peer reviewers that you know you still need to "make it pretty". May I suggest adding reaction gifs (maybe after you mention dysentery because I thought that was pretty funny and a gif would drive it home) or pictures of the La Cholla project (maybe a before/after)? This would make your project more skimmable so to speak and help it to better fit the genre conventions. Maybe you could even use columns so that your readers could literally see all three genres.


How I helped: I think I learned a lot from not really nailing the conventions of my QRG so I wanted to impart some wisdom onto others in this genre, and I think I was much more specific than "make it pretty" which was probably more helpful.


From Student's Guide: I considered the organization part of the questions. I read the paragraph and then considered how a QRG should look, which is why I complemented him on the use of short paragraphs and white space but suggested more images or gifs. 


What I admired: The detail! He obviously put a lot of research into this, and he also somehow made it entertaining and funny to read something about infrastructure which in my experience has only been previously done by John Oliver. Which you can watch if you're so inclined. The best part happens around 5:10, in my opinion.

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