Okay so I did this out of order but that's okay. Here is the link to the rough cut of my project. It's just a first draft so keep that in mind if it's short or missing pieces. Good luck Sarah. Thanks, Sarah.
Hi Sarah! First off, I thought that your first draft was great! I thought that your story at the beginning was a really good attention grabber. Your podcast kept me interested the entire time. But a few suggestions, you are missing a title. And also, I know it's a first draft, but for your final, music and sound effects will make it more interesting. Really good job though!
Hey Sarah, You gave a great review of my own draft so I thought I would return the favor! Your rough cut sounded really good so far, and I know it's from a few weeks so I'm sure you've already changed a lot of/added to what I'm about to say. For the form side of your podcast, I think that it has a lot of good things so far and also some things you could add to make it more appealing to listen to. First, your tone of voice, casual conversation, and speed is very effective. It doesn't sound like you just wrote an essay and then just turned it into audio content; it sounds like you are actually having a conversation with the audience. I like how you traced Barnes' (I think that's the right name) work and dedication to the law field throughout the whole piece and kept coming back to so many ideas that the listener could remember and relate to. Of course, adding in other audio clips and sound effects will be important in preparing a final cut of your podcast. When you first mention the U of A maybe you could have a quick background clip of the fight song or something. I think mentioning UA is important because it established credibility in both you as a speaker and in your sources so you would want to emphasize it as much as possible. Another suggestion might be to include music breaks between changes in genre and to separate from the intro and outro (which you will want your listeners to notice and specifically pay attention to). You are very creative in how you crafted your conclusion. It relates everything you discussed with why this is all important. It also connected to the beginning of the podcast where you talked about your personal interests and experiences with the field of the study. I enjoyed listening! Overall, I think this is a great first draft. Good luck with your final revisions tonight!
Hi Sarah!
ReplyDeleteFirst off, I thought that your first draft was great! I thought that your story at the beginning was a really good attention grabber. Your podcast kept me interested the entire time. But a few suggestions, you are missing a title. And also, I know it's a first draft, but for your final, music and sound effects will make it more interesting.
Really good job though!
Hey Sarah,
ReplyDeleteYou gave a great review of my own draft so I thought I would return the favor! Your rough cut sounded really good so far, and I know it's from a few weeks so I'm sure you've already changed a lot of/added to what I'm about to say. For the form side of your podcast, I think that it has a lot of good things so far and also some things you could add to make it more appealing to listen to.
First, your tone of voice, casual conversation, and speed is very effective. It doesn't sound like you just wrote an essay and then just turned it into audio content; it sounds like you are actually having a conversation with the audience. I like how you traced Barnes' (I think that's the right name) work and dedication to the law field throughout the whole piece and kept coming back to so many ideas that the listener could remember and relate to.
Of course, adding in other audio clips and sound effects will be important in preparing a final cut of your podcast. When you first mention the U of A maybe you could have a quick background clip of the fight song or something. I think mentioning UA is important because it established credibility in both you as a speaker and in your sources so you would want to emphasize it as much as possible. Another suggestion might be to include music breaks between changes in genre and to separate from the intro and outro (which you will want your listeners to notice and specifically pay attention to).
You are very creative in how you crafted your conclusion. It relates everything you discussed with why this is all important. It also connected to the beginning of the podcast where you talked about your personal interests and experiences with the field of the study. I enjoyed listening!
Overall, I think this is a great first draft. Good luck with your final revisions tonight!